I had to point this out, I just had to. It threw me for a loop and I just wanted you to know.
I should ask Jacob if he’s acquired any diseases since the last time he came to my room.
If Seth had cared about that, he would've asked before he had blown Jacob. You can get all kinds of fun STDs from oral sex and cumming isn't necessarily required to get things like herpes. – This is just me nit-picking, btw.
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That was the only actual note I had to give, but other than that. I really enjoyed the fic. I think you nailed the angst perfectly.
Jacob made Seth feel worthless, and I got that feeling exactly. I could feel Seth's love for Jacob, even though it was tortured. I felt him resisting, but unable to say 'no' because he just couldn't help himself.
And, lastly, I can't help but to hope that Edward and Jacob do eventually get over themselves and realize they had hard ons for each other and just get together.
Seth can meet Jasper and live happily ever after. It works. ;P
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Date: 2011-09-10 04:46 am (UTC)If Seth had cared about that, he would've asked before he had blown Jacob. You can get all kinds of fun STDs from oral sex and cumming isn't necessarily required to get things like herpes. – This is just me nit-picking, btw.
That was the only actual note I had to give, but other than that. I really enjoyed the fic. I think you nailed the angst perfectly.
Jacob made Seth feel worthless, and I got that feeling exactly. I could feel Seth's love for Jacob, even though it was tortured. I felt him resisting, but unable to say 'no' because he just couldn't help himself.
And, lastly, I can't help but to hope that Edward and Jacob do eventually get over themselves and realize they had hard ons for each other and just get together.
Seth can meet Jasper and live happily ever after. It works. ;P